Rust World - A Rimworld Series - Episode 1

Cataclysm Rim Days Ahead

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Point of Critique:You need a Channel background. Wonderfull Storywritting. Good Video Quality/Cut. Voice/Audio Quality great. Voice acting:Good.

Hey, cool Video! As others pointed out the storytelling is a bit rough sometimes. But thats totaly understandable. I had the same problem when i started writing and expecially later as a DnD Dungeon Master (the one telling the "story/setting") Active storytelling is simply no easy task. But i can see that you got what it needs. I can imagine that maybe some dnd tutorial on how to tell a good story might help you in some places. (Just an idea, maybe its just full of dnd terms of no use to you).

Edit: i already feel awful for not giving a single plus point. Please know, that your setting is awesome and your story is interesting...its just about those juicy few things that make a good story an awesome one :)

Also feel free to call me out as a nerd for talking about dnd under random videos ^^

among us world when??????

I absolutely love your storytelling. I was so sad when tragic event. This is bruuuuuuutal...

been watching you for quite a while. glad to see you expanding your skillset and trying new things. Keep working at doing what you enjoy.

i love the storytelling! the only thing thing that could make it better was better english!!

You might need to work on your verbal descriptions. This is interesting and fairly fun to watch but you're not really stortytelling, it feels more like a very basic recount of events in areas. Examples being "They walked for a long time inside a cave. Slowly but surely until they found the bright light. It would help if you described surroundings, how they were feeling, etc. If it was more verbose this would feel more alive. Enjoying thus far though.

MAD MAX
WORLD OF RUST

This is exactly my kind of shit. Love it!

Episode 2, the man in black dies and the series ends! hahaha

Really not bad, i could see this channel grow

BS RNG am I right💀

Nice channel looking forward for more

So far so good dude keep it up

Nice Rimworld series! Looking forward to future episodes!

love the story telling and good editing bro keep it up

You really put the story in storytelling I love it 💯

Ok but why is this so good?

Detroit?

Very nice. I would have used at least a fluid ideology though.

Mad respect for using Combat Extended! You are a bold one